An article by Ola Linden on the mounted combat material in Il Fior di Battaglia.
gannFull description
TLE=Electrical/Electronics
piano
TLE=Electrical/ElectronicsFull description
Full description
PASDescription complète
BASIC
LESSON 6 This is the wrap-up lesson in our six-week course. In addition to this lesson, you will receive a critique of the artwork that you submitted earlier in the session. The critique will be sent to you by email within four weeks, and you will also receive your diploma in that email. This week I’d like you to look at a sample of another student’s student’s critique so you can learn not only what to expect from your own critique, but but how to look critically at others’ artwork and what makes for more professional-looking m anga.
What interesting character. I wonder what kind of person he is - but from what I can see, he seems to be energetic, friendly and fashionable! I like the design on his clothes, it is something different. You did a good job drawing his whole body and even put his left hand in a certain pose! Well done! However, there is some areas that you can focus on to improve on the drawing. I have labeled such areas of potential improvements for you. Please refer to the comment section and the revised drawing for further explanation!
LESSON 6 Revised Drawing by Instructor Koda Tadashi ! Revised
Version:
The smaller panels indicates where you should focus on or adjustments made to the original drawing. Please use the numbers to locate comments on the next page.
1. Face shape: • Original drawing: Good job drawing his face! You gave him a nice, detailed expression. But to me, the jawline seems a little wide. • Revised drawing: In my redrawing, I refined his jawline to make it more rounded, and I have drawn him at an angle so that his face is facing the same direction as his body. 2. Posture and body: • Original drawing: You did a nice job drawing the body. For the most part he seems to be evenly proportioned. But it seems that his body is leaning forward and it looks like he is about to fall over. • Revised drawing: In my drawing, I have corrected the posture, so he is now standing upright. I have also added an extra “head” and a half (please refer to Lesson 3, in which we discuss headsize measurements) to make him look even more proportional. 3. A resting hand: • Original drawing: You drew both hands! Your effort to do so is admirable! • Revised drawing: I have corrected the pose for his right hand. Since his right hand is resting by his side, I have drawn it in a way that it looks like it is resting — when hands are resting and not using muscles, the fingers curve in towards the palm. 4. Direction of body and feet: • Original drawing: You also drew the feet! Feet are among the hardest for novice artists to draw is one of the hardest part and many people tends to avoid it. They look quite good too! • Revised drawing: I have only made small corrections. I have adjusted the direction of the feet a little so that they look natural - turning in the same direction as the body. 5. Overall comment: • Original drawing: I think that this is a very good drawing! You have attempted to draw all the body parts and even put the character is a pose! For the most part, the drawing is well proportioned but it needed some adjustments here and there. I would recommend that you focus on the face shape and make sure to measure you character using heads, so that they will look more proportional in the future!
! Conclusion Congratulations on completing the Manga University Basic Home Study Course, and submitting such an intriguing illustration. We really enjoyed having you as a student, and we hope you continue to study the weekly lessons and this critique whenever you feel need a bit of advice. We also encourage you to sign up for our Advanced Course. You can do so here. Now, go grab a sketchbook and keep on drawing!
