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Hwfn{`h jd Hqqfs Aj}}haucjo ms yyy/SHQ.CH@UQ/ajn Ugh aj}}hauhe hqqfs cq mhohfug ugh j}cicof`/ Sjx} i}feh cq ictho {}cj} uj aj}}haucjo/

J}cicof` Nfos ajxou}sq ehnjoqu}fuh {}ceh co ugh}h gh}cufih ms ah`hm}fucoi ugh ofucjof` {xm`ca gj`cefs/ F efs qxag fq Fxqu}f`cf Efs afo cn{}jth dhh`coiq jd {fu}cjuf`cus ujyf}eq joh–q ajxou}s fq yh`` fq ajxou ujyf}eq ugh mfqca }cigu jd ufbcoi f {xm`ca gj`cefs/ Dc}qu`s, ah`hm}fucoi f ajxou}sq ofucjof` efs nfbh ugh acuc|hoq dhh` {}jxe jd ughc} ajxou}s–q gcquj}caf` nc`hqujohq foe ofucjof` fagchthnhouq/ Dj} hwfn{`h, f ofucjof` efs ncigu ajnnhnj}fuh ugh ajxou}s–q coeh{hoehoah d}jn f us}foocaf` {jyh}, qxag fq d}foah–q Mfquc``h Efs '65 Lx`s# j} Fnh}caf–q Coeh{hoehoah Efs '5 Lx`s#/ Nj}hjth}, cu–q f ucnh dj} f`` acuc|hoq uj {f}ucac{fuh co ah`hm}fucjoq foe dhh` qj`cef}cus ycug ughc} ajxou}s–q djxoeh}q foe d}fuh}ocus fmjxu ughc} dh``jy acuc|hoq/ Qhajoe`s, f ofucjof` efs afo f`qj ajou}cmxuh uj ugh ajxou}s–q vxjuf jd {xm`ca gj`cefsq/ F`` yj}bh}q qgjx`e gfth houcu`he uj f ah}ufco oxnmh} jd {fce gj`cefsq {h} shf} foe ygfu mhuuh} yfs uj fagchth ugcq ugfo uj ah`hm}fuh f ofucjof` gj`cefs: F {xm`ca ah`hm}fucjo afo mh holjshe ms f``, coa`xecoi ohy foe hwcqucoi acuc|ho/ Gjyhth}, qjnh ofucjof` gj`cefs ah`hm}fucjoq nfs coacuh jth}.ugh.uj{ dhh`coiq jd  ofucjof` {}ceh ygj afo ux}o uj whoj{gjmcf fu ugh e}j{ jd f gfu/ Ugcq gfq mhho ehnjoqu}fuhe ug}jxigu }hahou Fxqu}f`cf Efs tcj`hoahq ygcag gfq qfe`s nf}}he ugcq gj`cefs/ F`ugjxig cu cq u}xh ugfu `f}ih {xm`ca ifugh}coiq afo qjnhucnhq vxcab`s ux}o uj tcj`hoah, ycug nj}h qu}xaux}he ah`hm}fucjoq foe f gcigh} {j`cah {}hqhoah ugcq afo mh ftjcehe/ Jth}f``, ah`hm}fucoi cu ygcag hoajx}fihq ofucjof` {}ceh foe dhh`coiq jd  ajn{focjoqgc{ ujyf}eq d}choeq, ohcigmjx}q, foe aj.yj}bh}q cq f ijje cehf mxu af}h nxqu ufbho ugfu cu ejhq oju hwfah}mfuh }facqu fuucuxehq/

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Jth}f`` > 7

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9

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9

Hwfn{`h jd Hqqfs Aj}}haucjo ms yyy/SHQ.CH@UQ/ajn Aj}}hauhe Nfos ajxou}chq ehnjoqu}fuh {}ceh co ughc} gh}cufih ms ah`hm}fucoi f ofucjof` {xm`ca

Ucqg Bc}b`foe 61*6*6= 7<;4 FN

gj`cefs/ F efs qxag fq Fxqu}f`cf Efs afo cn{}jth dhh`coiq jd {fu}cjucqn jd  {fu}cjucqn ujyf}eq

Ajnnhou< Nfbh‣qx}h‣sjx}‣q{h``coi‣jd‣

joh–q ajxou}s fq yh`` fq ajxou ujyf}eq ugh mfqca }cigu jd ufbcoi f {xm`ca gj`cefs/

{`x}f`q‣cq‣aj}}hau/‣

Dc}qu`s, ah`hm}fucoi f ajxou}s–q ofucjof` efs nfbh ugh acuc|hoq dhh` {}jxe jd ughc} ajxou}s–q gcquj}caf` nc`hqujohq foe ofucjof` fagchthnhouq/ Dj} hwfn{`h, f ofucjof` efs ncigu ajnnhnj}fuh ugh ajxou}s–q coeh{hoehoah d}jn f us}foocaf` {jyh}, qxag fq D}foah–q Mfquc``h Efs '65 Lx`s# j} Fnh}caf–q Coeh{hoehoah Efs '5 Lx`s#/ Nj}hjth}, cu cq f ucnh dj} f`` acuc|hoq uj {f}ucac{fuh co ah`hm}fucjoq foe dhh` qj`cef}cus ycug ughc} ajxou}s–q djxoeh}q foe d}fuh}ocus ujyf}eq ughc} dh``jy acuc|hoq/

Ucqg Bc}b`foe 61*6*6= 7<;4 FN

Ajnnhou< Ajou}faucjoq‣qxag‣fq‣‐cu–q„‣f}h‣ ujj‣codj}nf`/‣‣

Qhajoe`s, f ofucjof` efs afo f`qj ajou}cmxuh uj ugh ajxou}s–q vxjuf jd {xm`ca gj`cefsq/ F`` yj}bh}q qgjx`e mh houcu`he uj f ah}ufco oxnmh} jd {fce gj`cefsq {h} shf} foe ygfu mhuuh} yfs uj fagchth ugcq ugfo uj ah`hm}fuh f ofucjof` gj`cefs: F {xm`ca ah`hm}fucjo afo mh holjshe ms f``, coa`xecoi ohy foe hqufm`cqghe acuc|hoq acuc|hoq/

Ucqg Bc}b`foe 61*6*6= 7<6= FN

Ajnnhou< ‐hwcqucoi„‣cq‣ijje2‣‐hqufm`cqghe„‣

Gjyhth}, qjnh ofucjof` gj`cefs ah`hm}fucjoq nfs coacuh jth}.ugh.uj{ dhh`coiq jd 

cq‣mhuuh}/‣

ofucjof` {}ceh ygcag afo ux}o uj whoj{gjmcf fu ugh e}j{ jd f gfu/ Ugcq gfq mhho ehnjoqu}fuhe ug}jxig }hahou Fxqu}f`cf Efs tcj`hoah ygcag gfq qfe`s nf}}he ugcq

Ucqg Bc}b`foe 61*6*6= 7<;5 FN

gj`cefs/ F`ugjxig cu cq u}xh ugfu `f}ih {xm`ca ifugh}coiq afo qjnhucnhq vxcab`s ux}o

Eh`huhe<

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uj tcj`hoah, ycug nj}h qu}xaux}he ah`hm}fucjoq foe f gcigh} {j`cah {}hqhoah ugcq afo mh ftjcehe/

Ucqg Bc}b`foe 61*6*6= 7<;3 FN

Ajnnhou< Ugcq‣cq‣fo‣hwah``hou‣}hdxufucjo‣

Jth}f``, ah`hm}fucoi f {xm`ca gj`cefs ygcag hoajx}fihq ofucjof` {}ceh foe dhh`coiq jd ajn{focjoqgc{ ujyf}eq d}choeq, ohcigmjx}q, foe aj.yj}bh}q cq f ijje cehf mxu af}h nxqu mh ufbho ugfu cu ejhq oju hwfah}mfuh }facqu fuucuxehq/

yyy/SHQ.CH@UQ/ajn

{f}fi}f{g2‣yh``‣ejoh&‣ Ucqg Bc}b`foe 61*6*6= 7<;8 FN

Ajnnhou< ‐cu„‣cq‣oju‣a`hf}/‣Quf}u‣ugh‣

{f}fi}f{g‣ycug‣f‣ojxo,‣oju‣f‣{}jojxo/‣